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Nobody?

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Literature Text

Nobody

My best friend is my other half
Its always there right next me
It never leaves
It shares my pain 
I call it Nobody becuase its just like me

Nobody is left all alone 
Nobody talks to me
Nobody cry's while i do
Nobody has me as a friend

But Nobody isnt a good person
Nobody encourages me not to stop
Nobody tells me how horrible i am
Nobody just sits there and watches

Nobody can predict how im going to end...
Eh im feeling mute again. and violated...
This is terrible but i spent the last hour writing it. So meh, its okai
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:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

Your poem has a clear, strong theme that is emphasised constantly through repetition. "Nobody" in the given context relates to the feeling of exclusion, not only from society, but from a fair and happy life. The personification of "Nobody" is an interesting, and effective technique, which shows that the Persona's loneliness is so intense - so pervading, that she considers it a companion; as a soldier might consider Death his companion. The clever structuring of the stanzas allows for the simultaneous description of the personified "Nobody" and the neglect the Persona feels. "Nobody can predict how I'm going to end." This line is an extremely effective conclusion to the poem, as it shows the Persona's decisive act of rejecting her isolation and taking her fate into her own hands, rather than remaining a helpless victim of other's prejudice.